One late day I forgot to make a youtube video. I was on a 100 video streak I uploaded every day. But later that day I had to much homework and forgot about uploading. I woke up from my nap and I got on my xbox and made a video. there was 30 min left till 12:00 I finished editing now its uploading. I was so scared that I would loose my streak. It uploaded at 11:59 and I didnt loose my streak.
I think your story is creative but you should think of using stronger language in your story. Also, you have to include the prompt in the middle of a sentence.
ReplyDeleteI like your story, but I think you need to read it out loud and check for grammar errors. It is very creative.
ReplyDeleteyou should try to not use abbreviations like min for minute because this is formal writing but I like the story line just not quite sure about your grammar and what order you say things.
ReplyDeleteYour story is very creative but, how does this have anything to do with the picture? Also you use a lot of I's in your story. Make sure you rubies and edit!
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